Tuesday, August 30, 2016



Writing #2

Word Photos 

Creative Writing ~ Explore the Power of Personal Expression

As you work on writing in your journal, you are working on both your seeing and saying.  As you write to say what you see, you will begin to understand more - so you will have more to say, which in turn will lead to more seeing. 

In a way, you will use your words as a photographer uses a camera - you will become more alert, see more. There is a potential picture everywhere.  There is meaning in everything.  You will experience more fully.  

Now, sit down with your journal and begin the Writing Process - 
Review your day, look for those small moments that get 'captured' in your mind....

Now write in your journal - those seemingly nothings are most powerful.
Remember what we spoke about in class...

Do not explain - just see it fully with your words - stay grounded in the five senses - 
How did it look, feel, smell, taste, sound?  See it in new ways, from other perspectives, from another angle.  Move it around with words -  Then - in our journals, we may start by using lots of words - searching, wondering, poking around - trying to see what is there.  

We play with images - and metaphors, personification - literary devices -  to see what fits - then we tighten and focus -
Your first photos will include 150 to 200 words - take them, then - like a camera - tighten and focus.
Eliminate busy words and replace with meaningful words - draw a picture - a photo - FREEZE FRAME - SNAP SHOT of that moment - you are the photographer.  
Remember Dog - SHOW US WITH WORDS - reduce your photos to approximately 75 words each.

Now, fine tune, edit - check again, and write down your final piece with two word photos all on one page - each has a title - there is no epigraph for this writing piece - just two titles - and bylines.

Put your final piece in your writing portfolio - then go to our blog and type in your final pieces - 
Sample as follows;

The Flower
by Student L.

In a field, a perfect day.  Bright blue sky, deep green grass.  One flower is spotted as it smiles in the velvety emerald pasture.  Its bright yellow pedals, blowing in the wind.  Back and forth, back and forth, with a dancing rhythm to it.  Its strong pole like, green stem is holding it down.  The wild green leaves all around it.  As you look closer, the red and pink at the very center show within the yellow, blended well.  The beauty of it glows.  




83 comments:

  1. An animal, such a powerful, yet simple soul. When your heart breaks you can look at them in the eyes and they can see it, they can see you for who you really are. They are not there to judge you, tell you that you are right or wrong, but they are there to simply accept you for who you are. An animal simply put loves you in such a way that the love you receive feels free. That seems rare these days.

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  2. Swish!
    By Rees Goodall
    I was dancing around on the tan thin pieces of hardwood bouncing an orange ball and I threw it to the glass and it bounced off the white square and in. It kept happening the whole game and every single time the crowd went "woo-hoo" and I was smiling ear to ear. I was smiling for so long my face hurt and it felt like a bull ran into my face.

    Gone!
    By Rees Goodall
    As the ball was throw and the ball hit the bat everyone was hoping for a win. The ball hit the bat and it was going far. It didn't stop going it left the stadium that means a home run! Not one person there was quiet or sitting down. Everyone was jumping and screaming and everyone went home smiling

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    1. Thank you Rees, for your know-all of baseball. I can see the ball bouncing on the ground quietly. Nice job on the title and remember about your byline.

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    2. Thank you for writing this amazing paragraph. I like that you put everyone was hoping for the win. one thing that you could do better is not put your last name and you forgot to put a period. Good job Rees.-Breezy

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    3. i like it does make me see a ball thorn by atti

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    4. Hi Rees this is Kaisha, I can see the ball leaving the stadium. But maybe at the last sentence you could put a period.

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    5. Hi Rees I liked how you used Descriptive language in your paragraph.

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    6. Thank You Rees, for mentioning baseball that makes me happy. I don't know if you saw this but you said "the ball hit the bat" twice. I like how descriptive it is, like how you sail "it felt like a bull ran into my face!" Luckily i can't find anything misspelled or anything other then the byline. GREAT JOB REES -Michael

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  3. The Big Day
    By:Bryndal
    As I saddle up my horse in his bright leather saddle for the big day. I look into his brown beautiful eyes and I can just see that he is ready for the big day. We were going barrel racing! Then it was our turn. They called number 23 and that was our number. So I mounted my horse. We get into the arena and he takes off with his brown gorgeous mane blowing everywhere. He was galloping so fast that dust was flying everywhere. We didn't knock down a single barrel. At the end they announced that we had won. We got this big golden trophy and a brand new beautiful saddle.

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    1. Thank you for letting me smell the saddle. I think you could add your two word photos into one comment.

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    2. Hi Bryndal its Natalie I like how your in the picture your horse is the best I ever seen . I thought you went to a STABLE.

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  4. The Ride
    By:Bryndal
    Galloping through the trees in the trees in the dessert. A bright blue sky with beautiful trees. The brown beautiful mane blows in the wind. The horse is going so fast that just the gorgeous leather saddle is keeping me on. There is so much dust it seems I have disappeared. As the time goes by I feel more relaxed. The other horses go faster to try and keep up with us.

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    1. Thank you Bryndal for your horse-pitality. I can see the dust when you disappear. I can see the bright blue sky. You might say something the sound of the galloping - such as; "I can hear the thump of the gallop" - and I feel the leather saddle smelling like new melted woody wet wood - I think you might want to spell "dessert" - desert in this case.

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    2. Thank you Bryndal for your lovely paragraph. I liked the way you described the mane blowing in the wind and I could imagine all the dust and the trees. I would have liked you to describe the trees in more detail since it was in the desert. As Mrs Lane said, a little spelling mistake with desert and spellcheck would not have caught it. I always have my mom take a look before I push publish.

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  5. By Cody K
    The Doctor
    In the Doctors office patiently waiting watching the clock tick. Getting raped patiently waiting for the time to fly by. When it is we will fly by. Need to go back ready to be done. Fifteen shots later ready to be done while blood driping down my arm. Ten minits to wait finilly done. Ready to go home.

    The Castle
    On the day of Labor me and my brother played minecraft. It was veary fun. we played all day and night. We made a castle the biggest castle there is. My brother did the castle I did the villge. We had fun lots of fun. Some times I felt like I was flying thought the clouds. Now the day is done time to sleep but we had fun and that's all that maders

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    1. Thank you CJ For being so so descriptive. I can see you waiting in the doctor's office. I can see the great big castle. I think before you send it in you should do a spell check because I found some miss spelled words like minutes. ~ Livie

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    2. Hi its Arthur here. I think minits is spelled like this minutes. I like how you show the person exactly whats there.

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    3. Than you for a lifetime of a story. I can see the blood dripping down your arm at the docters office. I can see the castles with a village and you flying through the clouds. I think you can spell villge and maders differently like this- village and maters.

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    4. Thank you Cody I like that is very detailed but maybe you could spell minits like this minutes. -Bryndal

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    5. thank you cody, i could see the efert in bilding the cassele, and i cant beleve that you got 15 shots, you must of bin scared.

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    6. Hi this is Israel, I like how you are very precise but you might want to double check that spelling before you hit the publish button.

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  6. THE RAINBOW COLORS
    BY: FAITH F.

    The children patiently waited for the colors of the rainbow to ampere. As the colors flew into the window they apereed on the board. As the clouds covered the sky, the rainbow vanished. The children were in shock when the room went dark. The children waited patiently for the colors to appear again. When the cloud moved no colors appeared again. The children left the room and bright colors appeared once again.

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    1. Thank you skittles. I like how you did your tittle. I love how you said that the rainbow comes and goes. You also spelt every thing right. I can seethe rainbow all around me whenever I read this story. But what do you mean by board skittles. Is it in a house or out side you now what I mean skittles.-shay shay

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    2. i like it because i see the children waiting by atti

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  7. THE PUPPY OF MY LIFE
    BY:FAITH F.

    When my mom appeared out of her room and we all fell into shock. There was a small brown and white puppy in her hands. We all fell deep in love. We raced down the street to tell are dearest friends. The puppy slowly approached us with his sleepy eyes. He was scared and confused. He slept all day and played all night. He is slow and drossy all day long.

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    1. Thank you! I love hearing about how you felt when you got your new puppy. I can feel your excitement. Maybe next time you could describe your puppy more. Maybe you could say what kind of dog it was. - Delani

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    2. Nice work Faith but I am a bit wondering why you put so many things in the wrong spot. But I love the part where he opens his eyes.

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  8. When I See A Road
    By: Daniela D.

    Where will the road lead me will it lead me to darkness,happiness,a new day or a new life? When you cross a street you can go right or left one way will be different from another. One might lead you to friends one might lead you to enemies. The road can lead you many different ways you must choose one to follow. Which way should I go many people ask but you must decide that on your own.

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  9. When I See A Road
    By: Daniela D.

    Where will the road lead me will it lead me to darkness,happiness,a new day or a new life? When you cross a street you can go right or left one way will be different from another. One might lead you to friends one might lead you to enemies. The road can lead you many different ways you must choose one to follow. Which way should I go many people ask but you must decide that on your own.

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    1. You could try using more descriptive language to make your story more interesting.

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  10. The first serve
    by Alivia B
    The white ball is bumped and bounced and never touched the ground. The girls in there bright purple uniforms walked on the court. After the first rotation I had to serve. My team cheered me on while I hit the ball and it soared across the net and made it over. I was so proud of my self and all my friends gave me high fives. After the game my mom and dad gave me a big hug they were so proud.

    All of a sudden a little white flash ran in front of the car. My mom quickly drove up to it. It was a little white dog with a brown spot around it's eye. It's paws were pink, red and blue. The little dog was very scared but soon warmed up to my mom. He hopped into the car and lay down in the passenger seat and fell asleep dreaming of his new life with us.
    PS We tried to find his owner but could not.

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    1. CodyJace (CJ)
      Thank you Alivia. I liked how you did "The first serve" for your title but one thing i was a little confused about is that the title of the hole thing or jest that paragraph

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    2. Thank you Alivia you for describing your dog instead of just saying dog also I don't know if you noticed but capitalize f in first and s in serve by Daniela

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    3. thnks alivia, i could see the white ball bounceing on the ground, and i can see the dog than the space, kunfo, one i made up.

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    4. Hi this is Natalie I like what you said about volleyball, BUT is this your art piece?

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    5. I love hearing about how you met Toots/Bandit. I like how you described his paws. Maybe next time you can do a separate title and byline for his story.

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    6. Thank you Alivia I can see the white ball in the image. I can see your happiness after this. Maybe you could gave the name of the team you were on.-Elizabeth

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    1. Thank you for let me seeing the bird, but you could say what color birds and I really like your title- Rees.G

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    2. Thank you. I love how you said "two foxes that are girls".
      But I think you should say instead of friend you should say friends. I love how you said chill in with a fox. What do you mean by furry though and unconditional love. you now what i mean by that kaishi.- shay shay

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    3. Thank you for explaining chilling with the foxes. I love how you made it feel like you brought it to life! Great job Kaisha!

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    4. Hi Kaisha this is your BFFFFFAE, I like your Fox writing, BUT is this your art piece?

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  12. "The Race"
    By Delani D.

    It was a hot and sunny day. The water was cool on my skin. After the buzzer went off we dove in and our blue swim suits glided through the water. Friends and family clapped and shouted on the bleachers. We all swam as fast as we could. I was ahead by only a couple of feet. The water glistened as my heart raced. Only a second left and I finally touched the wall. I heard the judges announce that I won first place!

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    1. Thank you lani for your kindness and friendship. I can hear the buzzers and feel the water. I think you could describe the stroke and what team you are on. ~ LIVIE :)

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    2. Thank you Delani I like how detailed it was. But maybe next time you could describe how you felt after you won.-Bryndal

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  13. "The Jump"
    By: Delani D.

    It was a warm, bright day. Sunlight filtered through the tall pine trees. I climbed with my harness around my waist. I reached the wooden platform and looked down. I thought I was going to die. My heart was pounding and I was shaking. Then I jumped. I fell for about five seconds before my rope caught me and lowered me to the ground. I was so excited that I did it and I wanted to go again!!

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    1. Thank you lani for the beautiful picture in my mind. I love how you used descriptive words like sunlight filtered through the trees, warm, bright day.

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    2. Thank you Delani I see the way you were shaking in the image. I can feel your happiness after all this. I have a question what were you doing?

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  14. The Green Lady By: Daniela D.

    At the Statue of Liberty on the big, white ferry on the river as the cold air blew in my face, while I wore my cousin's old purple jacket I pointed and thought, look there it is the 'Green Lady' herself. As she stands there stepping on the chain it symbolizes freedom and holds a tablet with 1776 engraved in it, the year the USA declared independence and the Declaration of Independence was written.

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    1. Thank you Daniela. I love how you explained what she looks like and what she is holding. You also gave us a fact or two about why she is hear. See the purple you are wearing. I smell the white ferry river-Faith

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  15. The Perfect Pet By:Jillian K.

    In my car on an amazing night. I am just getting home and I walked in the dark room to a surprise. I saw my mom in a black tank top with a tiny,little,black baby pug in her shirt. She was sitting in a oversized chair tan rocking chair. Then I heard the baby puppy puppy bark "please help me." As I rushed over to squeeze her in my arms, my dad softly asked what shall we name her. As I ran to kitchen I let out a scream saying her name shall be Britney.


    Rodeo Funtown By: Jillian K.

    On a cold winter night I screamed with excitement in the middle of the desert. I was with my family and my close friend that is a girl. When we were at the rodeo it was smelly, howdy! The animals at the rodeo included bulls, cows, and some horses. We then went to the snack bar to get some candy. The area around the snack bar was sandy and colorful like a smurf puked rainbows in the sand but in 3D. I got some freshe popped popcorn. As it to start I was kicking us med just happy to watch it start.

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    1. Thank you Jillian. I like how you explained how excited you were. What it looked like. How you felt. What time it was. What you could do in the future is just check your work because you spelled puppy twice.

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    2. Hi its Arthur here. I like how made the dog say please help me, you made the dog talk. What douse med mean. you need to be more descriptive like what douse your friend looks like.

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    3. thank for Jilly for your make such a lovely paragraph and good job described how you got your perfect pet.And I think it is so funny that you gave the pug a voice and the pug said.you misspelled the word fresh.

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    4. Thank you Bean, for saying "like a smurf puked rainbows in the sand but 3D." But I don't think freshe is a word, just to let you know. I like how you described what the dog looked like. I don't know if you saw this but you said puppy twice in the sentence "Then I heard the baby puppy puppy bark "please help me." GOOD JOB. -Michael

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    5. Hi this is Israel, I like how you are putting a picture in my mind but you spelled fresh wrong and I have know idea what "med" means.

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    6. I love it Jillian I love puppys and she sounded so cute but you could be more detailed not to be mean but you could have told more about her - Kassia

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  16. Rainbow
    In the light blue sky a form of different colors in the air.It's reflection in the raindrops and puddles.I see it's bright colors reflect off of the sun.All it's colors put a smile on every child's face.

    Moon
    By:Elizabeth
    In the dark sky a bright form of light is in the air.A lot of little speckles with it.When this happens children are asleep peacefully.Lights come on to light the streets.This makes wander about it.

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  17. The Foxes
    By: Kaisha H.

    In the windy forest where the leaves fall, lays a beautiful red fox. The red fox is laying with its' children. The children a roughhousing. The mother fox is sleeping and the dad came home with a bloody dead rabbit in his mouth. After eating, the foxes went into a big enough hole to sleep in. The breeze touches the foxes fur. the baby foxes played in the yellow,red and orange leaves laying in a pile.

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  18. The Perfect Pic
    By: Shaylee s.

    I have a cat named Miley. She is white and gray. She has a same print as a tiger. She has bright yellow eyes. She is soft as a bunnies coat. Whenever she runs her pink and gold bell rings. Her collar is black with zebra stripes and it's fluffy with white all around the collar. Her purr is loud as a cackling fire blowing in the wind.She sucks on a big purple fluffy pillow to.

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  19. The Tree by: Steven H.

    On a hill on a sunny day.The sun shining on the emerald green grass. One tree is spotted as it waves in the smooth emerald pasture. Its leaves blowing in the cool breeze of the air. Side to side, side to side, with a happy rhythm to it. Its strong stick like trunk holding it up. As you look closer the brown green at the center show within a brown rough and tough circle of life.

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  20. Poke ball
    By: Shaylee s.

    I love Pokemon. They are like cardboard cards with a strange life like creature on top of the card and the attacks on the bottom.they come in different types of picture's and ATTACKS. They have a life bar at the top right. They come in four stages. The basic, stage one, stage two, ex, and mega. They also have weird names like spoink and molters. They also have trainer cards. Their is also a card called a energy card.

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  21. The Ocean by Steven H.

    On a beach on a sunny day. The sun shining jade blue waves. One ocean is seen as pushes up against the sandy beach. The jade blue waves blowing in the cool breeze of the air. Back and forth, back and forth, with a rhythm to it. Its strong waves pushing up on the sandy beach. As you look closer the blue and white at the center show within the jade blue waves of the ocean.

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  22. Two cute/funny kittens
    by: Arthur M.

    I got two small funny black kittens. They were about a few months or more. They were no bigger then a child's chest an stomach. We found them at the veterinarian's office. We got them about three years ago.


    The saved kitten
    by: Arthur M.

    The kitten was the same size as the other cats. It was ginger and white color. It was outside in my backyard. We got him last month. We named them Meowster,Tiger, and Oregano.

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  23. Circus Extravaganza
    By: Jenna D.

    as I lay on the blue and white hospital bed, 2 blue and green slips lay in moms hand saying "Circus". My mind going a mile a minute my nurse with a question among us she asked what do you think! As I lay on the hospital bed slowly but surely I felt the I.Vs go in and as mom put the tickets away everything got foggy and finally BOOM! I was out like a light.


    The feriouse flood
    By: Jenna D.
    We put our riding gear on and got ready for a long trail ride. As we spead down the road I felt the cold wind swish swiftly across my body. We then came across a puddle. The puddle strong and large with a small but swift tide. My quad rumbling ready to ride. I pushed hard on the gas pedal and SPLOOSH! My quad hit the water and all of a sudden stopped. My red with a white stripe was then drown.

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  24. Aquarium life By:Israel T.
    In the aquarium the water is blue as the sky. And the silent red lion-fish are swimming around not that worried about danger. The sharks looking for the tuna in the bottom of their tanks. And all the "oooooooo" and "ahhhhhh" from the the people who are watching. In the end of the day it's just the fish and the water. Sharks full of tuna.lion-fish still swimming. But in the morning everyone comes back to see the fish again.




    The grocery store By Israel T.
    At the grocery store there is food and objects everywhere. People using 10 dollar bills to buy their products. In the shopping carts there is milk,bread,and other foods that we need for breakfast,lunch,and dinner. Once their done buying their products they are leaving to go and in joy those products. But once everyone is gone,the store is more quiet than ever. But in the morning everyone comes back to buy some more products to in joy again.

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  25. Tripping Over A Log By Holden T.


    Today I saw a orange soccer ball in the air as I went to get the orange soccer ball I tripped over a log. I felt stinging pain as I fell to the dry grassy ground. I got up and saw a nasty scrape on my leg. Red blood leaked down my leg like a leaky faucet. I rubbed my leg to stop the pain, I dusted the grass off me, And I kept playing soccer.



    Shooting My Big Red And White Bow By Holden T.


    Today I felt small compared to my huge red and white bow. I saw two small round targets and arrows flying through the air like bullets as they hit the targets. I heard quiet muffled sound as the arrows hit the small round targets. I pulled the strong string of my huge red and white bow and let the arrow kill the center of my target.

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  26. Minions
    By Heba.h
    the yellow minions wear jean over -alls with the logo 'G', goggles and black gloves.Their boss is just as nefarious as they are when it comes to party's.these little nefarious minions 's names are Bob playful as a baby Stuart all ways hungry and loves yellow bananas and Kevin Adventurous and heroic.These little minions sing with there oval shape mouths and they eat ice cream with basting brush like arms and stick like legs.



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  27. Yummy Lemon Bites
    By Kaisha H

    On the marble kitchen counter, there is a juicy lemon bite waiting to get eaten.
    The lemon bite has yellow frosting that tastes like lemon and a white drizzle. That
    lemon bite sat for two years. The two year old lemon bite got thrown away and a
    new pack came. The lemon bites smell so good, dad could eat them all. Everyone
    got a juicy lemon bite. But by the time the lemon bites got by the mouth, they ran
    away!

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  28. SCHOOL By: Natalie G.

    School is a place where you learn. It helps you get the gist of everything you need to know. School can expand all the way to preschool, kinder garden, to eighth grade then fresh men, 11 to 12 high school then college. Its fun when you RELAX. A teacher of mine (Ms. Lane)said "Don't make things HARDER then it really is". There is a pattern every single day for school that's why children say school is bland.

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    1. SCHOOL By:Natalie G. AGAIN

      School is a place where you learn. As I walk into the classroom I see a 18 eyes staring into my eyes. You can see my sweat falling down on the ground. So nervous so scared couldn't even move I felt like a brick standing. As I got to get used to it I actually made friends, there names were Shaylee and Kaisha, and everyone. I had so much fun. I wish I can stay forever.

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  29. the endless rode,
    by Johnny [LUWE] G
    As the blue walls pass by, me and my brother run nonstop in loops of zigzag, curly, nonstop, tunnels. With the sun lighting us through the the tunnel, we would not even stop for water.

    a grate challenge,
    by Johnny [LUEW] G
    as a colored mat on a table laded in front of us we were scared. There where cards on the mat but only one could win from the cards.
    Then as time went by it was game.

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    1. Adding on to the first one, we passed many of things, like people, places, houses, and many more. We could here are harts racing and pounding, and are feet, we could here them. We never stopped and never got old of the same sound of are feet and hart.

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  30. PILLOW By: Natalie G.

    Pillows are the soft touch on your head. It helps you sleep when your awake, or beds. They come from cotton and fabric. During the day the wind from the fan blows into your pillow, making it cooler. The first tangible thing I touched was a pillow. People cut down cotton plants to make anything out of cotton. People use pillows in different ways. You can differentiate pillows that has lots of firm or not much firm.

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    1. PILLOW By:Natalie G. AGAIN

      For a pillow I feel the same way (soft and fluffy).
      As I walk into my Moms room I see a gigantic pillow.
      It was the size of my body. I would always sleep
      with it at night secretly in my room because
      it was my Dads pillow. I would play with it,
      climb on it, slide on it, and pretend it is a
      person, but I would have to give it back on
      Friday, Saturday, Sunday and Thursday.

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    2. PILLOW By:Natalie G. AGAIN

      For pillows I feel the same way (soft and fluffy). As I walk into my Moms room I saw a gigantic pillow. I was staring into the pillows fabric. I had to find out a way to climb to get it. There was a way to get I climbed a tower of boxes. I touched it then I was thinking maybe I should sneak it as in get it quietly. I put it in my room and play with it.

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  31. Hi Jilly this is Kaisha, I can see the dark room.But what in your car.

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  32. The Voice Kids by Heba H.
    The Voice Kids was the best experience of my life. I went with my cousins, uncles and aunts. The Voice Kids was packed with hundreds of people like Black Friday. All the police were there too. While the kids were singing, some people stood up and danced on the stairs like it was New Year's Eve and it was the countdown. It was very colorful and noisy like a school bus but not so colorful. I was about to fall asleep with some songs because they were so annoying like a witch that rides her broom and cackles. Overall, it was good like the sound of rain. There were so many lights, it was like the Fourth of July but even better.

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  33. Rain By: Briann G.


    Rain is like silver droplets that fall from the dark blue sky. They fall so fast it is as if they are racing to the ground. It is like someone is sitting in the clouds crying. When the rain pours it is like a stampede of horses running by. It is like the rain never ends.



    Thunder By: Briann G.


    The roaring sound of thunder is like the beating of a drum. Thunder is like a huge giant clapping in the stormy sky. Thunder is so loud that it shakes everything in its path. Thunder tells me that a big storm is coming. The thunder roars through the mountains and echoes through the valley.

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  34. Pet dog

    by atti.g

    I was at the airport. to get a white and brown dog. he was in a black and white kennel. he wasso happy to see us he almost fell by waging his .

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  35. brown dogs

    by atti.g

    There are three baby brown dogs.one of then is named zoey. another is browny and peanut. the all play routy to

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  36. Ballet by: Kassia S.

    The dark stage waits for a foot to dance. Then a purple and gold tutu comes. It sparkles as the dancers dance like swans on a lake. it was like a curled up hedgehog on their heads. It was a strong quil on a hedgehogs head it stuck out under them. It was a rain drop in a big puddle with outer drops hard to spot, to see the main ballerina. The back was as black as night.

    Moon by Kassia S.

    The silver of a glass slipper. A crescent like a whole is in the night. It is in the dark as night. In the sky full of diamonds. it sparkles like sequins in the sky. It has a shadow like the sun. It shines like a star. The sky then makes it the brake of dawn. The sky then makes it the brake of dawn. Then it goes with the colors of the wind. The moon is a bright star in the sky.

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  37. atticus art

    is gods of all creation can be enslaved by a ten year old

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